Good fan fiction. NOW WHY DOSE EVERYONE FOCUS ON THE CAPS!? Srsly the Grammar Nazis have arived to ethnically clence the fourms of all who make mistakes.These fourms are so toxic. It the holidays and people are yelling about grammar.
It's in the Warper DNA lol, they must be part Warper.
Narrate it again, except read it as a fishing tale, and edit the grammar / story flow a bit to make it easier to process. Like if you were telling the story of the time you caught a 4 foot bass! No really!. It might fit better and be sort of cool.
We could make it a game, where @Julian1337331nailuJ comes up with stories, and we edit them & make them entertaining, which might help him with his communications skills.
And I narrate them because I like to punish my body.
Reminds me so much of the guy who read the bee movie script
According to all known laws
of aviation,
there is no way a bee
should be able to fly.
Its wings are too small to get
its fat little body off the ground.
The bee, of course, flies anyway
because bees don't care
what humans think is impossible.
I've got a lot of big life decisions
to think about.
What life? You have no life!
You have no job. You're barely a bee!
Would it kill you
to make a little honey?
Barry, come out.
Your father's talking to you.
Martin, would you talk to him?
Barry, I'm talking to you!
You coming?
Got everything?
All set!
Go ahead. I'll catch up.
Don't be too long.
Watch this!
Vanessa!
- We're still here.
- I told you not to yell at him.
He doesn't respond to yelling!
- Then why yell at me?
- Because you don't listen!
I'm not listening to this.
Sorry, I've gotta go.
- Where are you going?
- I'm meeting a friend.
A girl? Is this why you can't decide?
Bye.
I just hope she's Bee-ish.
They have a huge parade
of flowers every year in Pasadena?
To be in the Tournament of Roses,
that's every florist's dream!
Up on a float, surrounded
by flowers, crowds cheering.
A tournament. Do the roses
compete in athletic events?
No. All right, I've got one.
How come you don't fly everywhere?
It's exhausting. Why don't you
run everywhere? It's faster.
Yeah, OK, I see, I see.
All right, your turn.
TiVo. You can just freeze live TV?
That's insane!
You don't have that?
We have Hivo, but it's a disease.
It's a horrible, horrible disease.
Oh, my.
Dumb bees!
You must want to sting all those jerks.
We try not to sting.
It's usually fatal for us.
So you have to watch your temper.
Very carefully.
You kick a wall, take a walk,
write an angry letter and throw it out.
Work through it like any emotion:
Anger, jealousy, lust.
Oh, my goodness! Are you OK?
Yeah.
- What is wrong with you?!
- It's a bug.
He's not bothering anybody.
Get out of here, you creep!
What was that? A Pic 'N' Save circular?
Yeah, it was. How did you know?
It felt like about 10 pages.
Seventy-five is pretty much our limit.
You've really got that
down to a science.
- I lost a cousin to Italian Vogue.
- I'll bet.
What in the name
of Mighty Hercules is this?
How did this get here?
Oute Bee, Golden Blossom,
Ray Liotta Private Select?
- Is he that actor?
- I never heard of him.
- Why is this here?
- For people. We eat it.
You don't have
enough food of your own?
- Well, yes.
- How do you get it?
- Bees make it.
- I know who makes it!
And it's hard to make it!
There's heating, cooling, stirring.
You need a whole Krelman thing!
- It's organic.
- It's our-ganic!
It's just honey, Barry.
Just what?!
Bees don't know about this!
This is stealing! A lot of stealing!
You've taken our homes, schools,
hospitals! This is all we have!
And it's on sale?!
I'm getting to the bottom of this.
I'm getting to the bottom
of all of this!
Hey, Hector.
- You almost done?
- Almost.
He is here. I sense it.
Well, I guess I'll go home now
and just leave this nice honey out,
with no one around.
You're busted, box boy!
I knew I heard something.
So you can talk!
I can talk.
And now you'll start talking!
Where you getting the sweet stuff?
Who's your supplier?
I don't understand.
I thought we were friends.
The last thing we want
to do is upset bees!
You're too late! It's ours now!
You, sir, have crossed
the wrong sword!
You, sir, will be lunch
for my iguana, Ignacio!
Where is the honey coming from?
Tell me where!
Honey Farms! It comes from Honey Farms!
Orazy person!
What horrible thing has happened here?
These faces, they never knew
what hit them. And now
they're on the road to nowhere!
Just keep still.
What? You're not dead?
Do I look dead? They will wipe anything
that moves. Where you headed?
To Honey Farms.
I am onto something huge here.
I'm going to Alaska. Moose blood,
crazy stuff. Blows your head off!
I'm going to Tacoma.
- And you?
- He really is dead.
All right.
Uh-oh!
- What is that?!
- Oh, no!
- A wiper! Triple blade!
- Triple blade?
Jump on! It's your only chance, bee!
Why does everything have
to be so doggone clean?!
How much do you people need to see?!
Open your eyes!
Stick your head out the window!
From NPR News in Washington,
I'm Oarl Kasell.
But don't kill no more bugs!
- Bee!
- Moose blood guy!!
- You hear something?
- Like what?
Like tiny screaming.
Turn off the radio.
Whassup, bee boy?
Hey, Blood.
Just a row of honey jars,
as far as the eye could see.
Wow!
I assume wherever this truck goes
is where they're getting it.
I mean, that honey's ours.
- Bees hang tight.
- We're all jammed in.
It's a close community.
Not us, man. We on our own.
Every mosquito on his own.
- What if you get in trouble?
- You a mosquito, you in trouble.
Nobody likes us. They just smack.
See a mosquito, smack, smack!
At least you're out in the world.
You must meet girls.
Mosquito girls try to trade up,
get with a moth, dragonfly.
Mosquito girl don't want no mosquito.
You got to be kidding me!
Mooseblood's about to leave
the building! So long, bee!
- Hey, guys!
- Mooseblood!
I knew I'd catch y'all down here.
Did you bring your crazy straw?
We throw it in jars, slap a label on it,
and it's pretty much pure profit.
What is this place?
A bee's got a brain
the size of a pinhead.
They are pinheads!
Pinhead.
- Oheck out the new smoker.
- Oh, sweet. That's the one you want.
The Thomas 3000!
Smoker?
Ninety puffs a minute, semi-automatic.
Twice the nicotine, all the tar.
A couple breaths of this
knocks them right out.
They make the honey,
and we make the money.
"They make the honey,
and we make the money"?
Oh, my!
What's going on? Are you OK?
Yeah. It doesn't last too long.
Do you know you're
in a fake hive with fake walls?
Our queen was moved here.
We had no choice.
This is your queen?
That's a man in women's clothes!
That's a drag queen!
What is this?
Oh, no!
There's hundreds of them!
Bee honey.
Our honey is being brazenly stolen
on a massive scale!
This is worse than anything bears
have done! I intend to do something.
Oh, Barry, stop.
Who told you humans are taking
our honey? That's a rumor.
Do these look like rumors?
That's a conspiracy theory.
These are obviously doctored photos.
How did you get mixed up in this?
He's been talking to humans.
- What?
- Talking to humans?!
He has a human girlfriend.
And they make out!
Make out? Barry!
We do not.
- You wish you could.
- Whose side are you on?
The bees!
I dated a cricket once in San Antonio.
Those crazy legs kept me up all night.
Barry, this is what you want
to do with your life?
I want to do it for all our lives.
Nobody works harder than bees!
Dad, I remember you
coming home so overworked
your hands were still stirring.
You couldn't stop.
I remember that.
What right do they have to our honey?
We live on two cups a year. They put it
in lip balm for n
I regret everything
This is... actually pretty impressive. How many times did you have to re-watch some of these scenes to write it all down? I tried watching the Bee Movie once but...
@OP
It's fantastic for you to be writing at your age and because of that you'll get a lot of practice that other writers (like me) missed. There are even famous authors who had aspergers so don't let that get in your way. You have the bare bones of a good story here with a lot of backstory that you can explore, it just needs to be fleshed out and expanded. If you're serious about writing check at the Young Writers Program through NaNoWriMo (ie, ywp.nanowrimo.org may or may not be just for november though) Cheers.
Narrate it again, except read it as a fishing tale, and edit the grammar / story flow a bit to make it easier to process. Like if you were telling the story of the time you caught a 4 foot bass! No really!. It might fit better and be sort of cool.
We could make it a game, where @Julian1337331nailuJ comes up with stories, and we edit them & make them entertaining, which might help him with his communications skills.
And I narrate them because I like to punish my body.
Everything you say is gold. IRL and on this god damn forum. Take a gold star, dammit!
Day 1: The day I got here. When I woke up, I was immediately surprised by the fact that the escape pod was damaged. It had been tested with everything and sustained no damage, but this? Impossible! I honestly said, "What could have damaged the escape pod? It’s impossible to damage it!" (Please don't be a Gramzi and annoy me about my grammar errors.) I sighed and left the escape pod.
The Aurora was what I saw first. "Wow. What could have happened to that?" Then I looked behind myself, and I saw the airship. When I saw the airship I said, "What!?!? WHAT!?!? WHAT HAPPENED TO THE AIRSHIP!?!?" I was surprised. Then I just decided to go into the water. How? Simple. Sprinting- and Jumping. When I had gone underwater (I'm a Lucario because why not.) I saw a Warper. Then I heard it through my suit’s radio, and it said: "Subject detected. Main task switched." I then get my main stasis cannon and I launch it at the Warper to get it to stay still, so I can’t be launched away. Then I get into the escape pod and go to its storage bay. Then I get the Base Building Kit and just get back out. Then I start building my base.
My base looks a lot different than everybody else's. It’s small at first. It has a basic Eternal Power Generator Model 1. The Eternal Power Generator can be upgraded. I always have my first models made without any materials needed. However, Despite being Second In Command of the Rich Clan (I was there then it started), the upgrades will take some materials. The tools were on emergency mode and you will need a supercomputer for them to be put off of emergency mode. However, that will need a lot of materials to make.
Day 2. I got a repair tool after a while of working in the base. When I got it I said "Yes! A repair tool!" I then went to the escape pod to repair it. When I repaired it I got a 10% material discount, meaning I can get things faster. It was then I realized: I might have forgotten about a possible explosion chance. However, I thought, it will take a few more days to have it explode.
Episode 1 ends here. You guys can change the episodes. If you want to join, you can, if you want other things to happen.
I removed superfluous capitalization, changed some basic text to make sentences make logical sense, but for the most part I've left the basic story untouched. A few notes to @Julian1337331nailuJ: Capitalizing every word makes the text rather an eyesore to read. It stresses each word unnecessarily, confuses objects that should be capitalized, and muddles sentences- rendering them difficult to read. Once the capitalisations are removed, the story is actually pretty comprehensible.
I do hope you used something like an online text converter!!!
Ya got the voice, just need a proper mic like the Samson C01U PRO, can't get much better than that one for plug and play USB. You'd have to go above pro, meaning above €300, to get a significantly better one. Forget that Razor and Blue stuff, they're overpriced and have tiny condensers, which is VERY bad for voice work...
Ya got the voice, just need a proper mic like the Samson C01U PRO, can't get much better than that one for plug and play USB. You'd have to go above pro, meaning above €300, to get a significantly better one. Forget that Razor and Blue stuff, they're overpriced and have tiny condensers, which is VERY bad for voice work...
Yo, tell me more about that stuff m8. Everyone told me Blue mics were good for the price. though even I can hear how shitty and unprofessional it sounds. And I even made a sound dampening box for it to improve it and it still sounds like shit.
What would be the best quality mic for a broke ass college student like myself?
Like I said that Samson I mentioned is miles ahead in terms of actual recording quality and is 1/3 the price. It just lacks features, like multiple sound settings and gain control, compared to those flashy ones. That first feature is useless anyway, because that's the cause for the smaller condensers. That second feature, well not so much needed where USB mics are concerned (this ain't' XLR)... I can record perfectly fine at ~15-20% gain
It is by far the best budget/entry level USB mic out there. Just have a gander at this lads videos on it. He knows his stuff and the C01U PRO gets his vote. this is the first USB mic he doesn't hate
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(So. Does Anybody Want To Join This "Story"? The Quotation Marks Are There Because This Is More Like A Roleplay. An Unintentional Roleplay That I Just Recently Found Out This Was Less Like A Story And More Like A Roleplay.)
What dose the airship look like. I want to make a fanfiction which includes your airship wreck. Because crashed ships are cool. Especially the technology inside them. (I like ur fan fic and am looking forward to episode 2)
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(The Airship Looks Kinda Like The Halbird. From Kirby. Plus An Aircraft Carrier. All Powered By 4 Large Relm Turbines That Have Lights On The Edges. If Ruined The Airship Looks Like 200,000 Nuclear Explosives Hit It. Its Large, Capable Of Holding 200,000,000 Nuclear Explosives, And It Can Survive A Lot. Plus It Has An Internal Reactor That Uses Anti-Dust And Dust For Its Energy. Emergency Generators Use Fuel. Hydrogen Fuel. And It Has Its Own Quantum Computer. A Quantum Super Computer. Anyways. Its Not A Blimp. And It Will Be Huge.)
(The Airship Looks Kinda Like The Halbird. From Kirby. Plus An Aircraft Carrier. All Powered By 4 Large Relm Turbines That Have Lights On The Edges. If Ruined The Airship Looks Like 200,000 Nuclear Explosives Hit It. Its Large, Capable Of Holding 200,000,000 Nuclear Explosives, And It Can Survive A Lot. Plus It Has An Internal Reactor That Uses Anti-Dust And Dust For Its Energy. Emergency Generators Use Fuel. Hydrogen Fuel. And It Has Its Own Quantum Computer. A Quantum Super Computer. Anyways. Its Not A Blimp. And It Will Be Huge.)
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(There Are More Things About It. So Many Things That I Can Only Currently Talk About The Escape Pods. They Are Spherical For When It Rolls To Move. It Has Gyroscopes To Roll, It Has A Parachute Because That's Obvious, It Has Landing Legs For Some Reason. I Think Its For The Door. I Don't Know. Anyways It Has Internal Gravity Generators, Smaller Versions Of The Ships Emergency Generators And A Quantum Computer.)
(There Are More Things About It. So Many Things That I Can Only Currently Talk About The Escape Pods. They Are Spherical For When It Rolls To Move. It Has Gyroscopes To Roll, It Has A Parachute Because That's Obvious, It Has Landing Legs For Some Reason. I Think Its For The Door. I Don't Know. Anyways It Has Internal Gravity Generators, Smaller Versions Of The Ships Emergency Generators And A Quantum Computer.)
I created chapter 1 of my fan fic. Prepare thy self (for a load of reading)
(There Are More Things About It. So Many Things That I Can Only Currently Talk About The Escape Pods. They Are Spherical For When It Rolls To Move. It Has Gyroscopes To Roll, It Has A Parachute Because That's Obvious, It Has Landing Legs For Some Reason. I Think Its For The Door. I Don't Know. Anyways It Has Internal Gravity Generators, Smaller Versions Of The Ships Emergency Generators And A Quantum Computer.)
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Hehe, you sounded like you were reading it at gunpoint. Seriously though, nice voice acting.
It's in the Warper DNA lol, they must be part Warper.
My body is ready for the pain
This is... actually pretty impressive. How many times did you have to re-watch some of these scenes to write it all down? I tried watching the Bee Movie once but...
This is possibly the best thing to ever appear on the internet.
I think you won the internet
It's fantastic for you to be writing at your age and because of that you'll get a lot of practice that other writers (like me) missed. There are even famous authors who had aspergers so don't let that get in your way. You have the bare bones of a good story here with a lot of backstory that you can explore, it just needs to be fleshed out and expanded. If you're serious about writing check at the Young Writers Program through NaNoWriMo (ie, ywp.nanowrimo.org may or may not be just for november though) Cheers.
Epic reading voice though.
Everything you say is gold. IRL and on this god damn forum. Take a gold star, dammit!
You're welcome.
I do hope you used something like an online text converter!!!
Ya got the voice, just need a proper mic like the Samson C01U PRO, can't get much better than that one for plug and play USB. You'd have to go above pro, meaning above €300, to get a significantly better one. Forget that Razor and Blue stuff, they're overpriced and have tiny condensers, which is VERY bad for voice work...
Yo, tell me more about that stuff m8. Everyone told me Blue mics were good for the price. though even I can hear how shitty and unprofessional it sounds. And I even made a sound dampening box for it to improve it and it still sounds like shit.
What would be the best quality mic for a broke ass college student like myself?
It is by far the best budget/entry level USB mic out there. Just have a gander at this lads videos on it. He knows his stuff and the C01U PRO gets his vote. this is the first USB mic he doesn't hate
episode 2 please
My inner masochist is not yet satiated I'm excited to hear more!
It doesn't matter what any of us want, if you want to do your thing then do your thing.
Please do! I'll get the popcorn ready.
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all I have to say is wow (click the link. do it)
I created chapter 1 of my fan fic. Prepare thy self (for a load of reading)
You're actually pretty smart!
I think I died a little just by hearing this. Brother, you are a based individual.