Excellent <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo--> Still ever eager to read another chapter, mate.
next chapter is done, but I haven't edited it yet. Plus, I was considering not posting it until I had the chapter after it finished as well *the ending of the next chapter is rather curious* SO, it should be posted later tonight after I reread it and get a friend to tell me how bad my readability is.
<ul><li><i>"What’s you’re name?"</i> - "your"</li><li><i>"An Onos wouldlook at the blockade..."</i> - just need a space.</li><li><i>"Something scraped across the ground ."</i> - space unnecessary.</li></ul> A very interesting ending...I just hope that there will be a bit of clarification later on in the story <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.natural-selection.org/forums/html//emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo--> Very nice work.
always happy to get things fixed by you <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif' /><!--endemo--> and don't worry worry, the next chapter *and the following* are somewhat explains everything... woo.... but no time to write that today, must go see chicago <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/wink.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink.gif' /><!--endemo--> *musical, got good tickets, and for free*
<!--QuoteBegin-DeepShadows+Mar 14 2004, 02:54 AM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (DeepShadows @ Mar 14 2004, 02:54 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->always happy to get things fixed by you <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif' /><!--endemo--> and don't worry worry, the next chapter *and the following* are somewhat explains everything... woo.... but no time to write that today, must go see chicago <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/wink.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink.gif' /><!--endemo--> *musical, got good tickets, and for free*<!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->
A pleasure to fix things for you too <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo--> Enjoy the musical, I haven't been able to see it in theatre but I really liked the movie!
mf... I've lost a lot of motivation to write it. The next chapter is finished but... don like it. Having someone review it for me tonight... but whenever I spend a long time working on something I come to hate it. Bugs me that the universe isn't an original idea of mine, bugs me this bugs me that.... I'm just bugged.
but anyway, if anything goes to plan, chapter should be up later tonight. The majority of it is dialogue, which bugs me in any instance..... blah *head explodes*
Dammit! Don't give up! Don't do this to me! I may not be the most vocal of supporters, (how many "nice" or "Great Job" posts can you make before it starts getting spammy?) but that doesn't change how much I like the story. Don't give up on it yet, please.
Please continue this story. It's really good and I'd love it if you'd keep writing. Do it for your fans <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/wink.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink.gif' /><!--endemo-->
I've just wasted two hours reading through the whole thing. Do continue. *note the tone of understatement here*
in other words
FINISH THE FICKING THING, DAMMIT! (if you need motivation, how's a death-threat?) <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif' /><!--endemo-->
but seriously, do it. If not for yourself, then for *me*.
I hope this somehow makes up for how long it took <!--emo&:(--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/sad.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='sad.gif' /><!--endemo--> and I hope someone is still left who wants to read them. <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo--> Also keep in mind, I haven't really reviewed these yet, and they are subject to minor tweaking. Feel free to leave any input you might have.
No worries about the time taken <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo--> Three more excellent chapters to add to the rest ? I can?t find anything wrong with them, really. I?m not sure which dream Jack refers to, though ? there are so many visions he has. I remember something vaguely (sorry, it?s been a while and I don?t remember which chapter it?s in) about the painting, and the various ones about Darkens and this skulk as a woman. Maybe some clarification as to which dream it was?
I don't think you can <b>not</b> finish it, the way it's going <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo--> Nice work.
A triple update! Whoohooo! <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif' /><!--endemo--> Great as always.
Hey! I knew you still had the stuff to continue <i>Monster</i>!
So close, DeepShadows! So close! You're almost there to finishing the story! Keep going!
<i>"I got my guns back," Bishop said.</i> I love that line. It's like it was straight out of an original movie written by you <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif' /><!--endemo-->.
Its been a month since an update <!--emo&:(--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/sad.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='sad.gif' /><!--endemo-->
I just read the story.... there arn't words to describe it. Such a great story I thought I was reading something on the scale of Lord of the Rings... only WAY BETTER!! I hope you never finish, but keep writing and writing more and more about this cool universe that you have created!
..... heh <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo--> how do I live up to praise like that? It's 3 am, and i have half the chapter done.... but I don't think I can keep this up tonight... so I won't have it up just yet <!--emo&:(--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/sad.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='sad.gif' /><!--endemo--> but mark my words, it is getting done this week.
to tide you off, here's a bad joke:
panda walks into a bar, orders bamboo, eats, shoots the guy next to him, and walks out. "Wut da hel" says the man who was shot. The bar tnder shrugs and replies: "Eh, he's a panda. He eats bamboo shoots and leaves."
.......................... no? <!--emo&:(--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/sad.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='sad.gif' /><!--endemo--> I try.
Comments
check back in about 4 hours
part 29 should be coming later tonight, if I can handle it.
A very interesting ending...I just hope that there will be a bit of clarification later on in the story <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.natural-selection.org/forums/html//emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo--> Very nice work.
A pleasure to fix things for you too <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo--> Enjoy the musical, I haven't been able to see it in theatre but I really liked the movie!
but anyway, if anything goes to plan, chapter should be up later tonight. The majority of it is dialogue, which bugs me in any instance..... blah *head explodes*
tacos anyone?
Anyway, I'd hate to see the fanfic die, heck, take it off the NS track if you need to or want to, but it's a really great fanfic. :x
I may not be the most vocal of supporters, (how many "nice" or "Great Job" posts can you make before it starts getting spammy?) but that doesn't change how much I like the story.
Don't give up on it yet, please.
*note the tone of understatement here*
in other words
FINISH THE FICKING THING, DAMMIT!
(if you need motivation, how's a death-threat?)
<!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif' /><!--endemo-->
but seriously, do it. If not for yourself, then for *me*.
<a href='http://nsmonster.tripod.com/part29.html' target='_blank'>Part 29</a>
<a href='http://nsmonster.tripod.com/part30.html' target='_blank'>Part 30</a>
and
<a href='http://nsmonster.tripod.com/part31.html' target='_blank'>Part 31</a>
I hope this somehow makes up for how long it took <!--emo&:(--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/sad.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='sad.gif' /><!--endemo--> and I hope someone is still left who wants to read them. <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo--> Also keep in mind, I haven't really reviewed these yet, and they are subject to minor tweaking. Feel free to leave any input you might have.
I don't think you can <b>not</b> finish it, the way it's going <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo--> Nice work.
Or rather... damn great job!
So close, DeepShadows! So close! You're almost there to finishing the story! Keep going!
<i>"I got my guns back," Bishop said.</i> I love that line. It's like it was straight out of an original movie written by you <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif' /><!--endemo-->.
to tide you off, here's a bad joke:
panda walks into a bar, orders bamboo, eats, shoots the guy next to him, and walks out.
"Wut da hel" says the man who was shot. The bar tnder shrugs and replies:
"Eh, he's a panda. He eats bamboo shoots and leaves."
.......................... no? <!--emo&:(--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/sad.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='sad.gif' /><!--endemo--> I try.