Heh, as I figured. Still I think the story works in general, would have been nice to see it inspire someone <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile-fix.gif' /><!--endemo-->.
it's more fun to give guidelines than proper plots... lets people put a bit of themselves into it rather than just 'cut n pasting' one of your works. More satisfying for everyone involved in the end. That's why my suggestions were rather open-ended :3
You're right but I'd had that concept come to me a few weeks ago and then never thought about it or fleshed it out, as soon as I read this post it came back to me and it took form in my head as I wrote it down, thats why I stopped halfway through to just summarise it or it might have ended as a (very) short story. Was just 'cut n pasting' from my head <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile-fix.gif' /><!--endemo-->
I just can't think of an idea without trying to flesh it out further unless I get distracted, it's a weakness <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile-fix.gif' /><!--endemo-->
CplDavisI hunt the arctic SnonosJoin Date: 2003-01-09Member: 12097Members
Record some NS demos and make a story about Cpl.Davis's great Onos hunting expedition. <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif' /><!--endemo-->
<!--QuoteBegin-CplDavis+Apr 19 2005, 11:41 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (CplDavis @ Apr 19 2005, 11:41 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> Record some NS demos and make a story about Cpl.Davis's great Onos hunting expedition. <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif' /><!--endemo--> <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd--> <obligatory quip>Watch out dude, he might cast a can of vegetable paste as you. <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif' /><!--endemo--></quip>
Honestly though, which one are you going for caboose?
You could always show the normal, everyday life of a teen, yet he keeps being visited by his friends who are asking him "why he did it". Eventually, as the day progresses, the main character gets more and more agitated, until, as he nearly cracks from the pressure, he goes to a shed/basement/field and weeps over the bodies of the friends he killed accidently/in a fit of rage.
You could do a Sixth Sense-style reveal of one of the victims by having said victim follow the main character to the burial site, only choosing to reveal the wound (most likely in the victim's back) right before the graves/bodies are shown.
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/me heads back to the drawing board.
I just can't think of an idea without trying to flesh it out further unless I get distracted, it's a weakness <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile-fix.gif' /><!--endemo-->
<obligatory quip>Watch out dude, he might cast a can of vegetable paste as you. <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif' /><!--endemo--></quip>
Honestly though, which one are you going for caboose?
You could do a Sixth Sense-style reveal of one of the victims by having said victim follow the main character to the burial site, only choosing to reveal the wound (most likely in the victim's back) right before the graves/bodies are shown.