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MeanMrMustard
Join Date: 2003-11-23 Member: 23456Members
Join Date: 2003-11-23 Member: 23456Members
<div class="IPBDescription">My first go</div> hello. This is my first post on this forum.
Hope you like it.
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I was lost, slowly being digested by the multitude of dark decaying tunnels that had lured so many helpless victims. I could feel the fear, plagueing my blood, pumping around my veins until it had consumed my vulnerable shell.
The team had been wiped out, and with it, any hope of being blasted off this poisonous planet.
During the confusion of the attack, i fell down a manhole, the darkness evading my mind, attacking my bravery and emphasising my isolation.
My ammo was low aswell as my self-confidence. The concoction of Alien Screams and Human slaughter fuelled my paranoia, the end was nigh.
Soon my shoulder lamp would decline in light, and with it my chances of survival. My hands gripped my rifle, my soul, my fortress. Finger on the cold, merciless trigger, I hoped to god I would not have to press it.
Luck was not on my side. As I narrowed my eyes, the shape came into focus. It stared straight into my eyes, searching for my fate and eradicating my future. My life did not flash before me, nor did I freeze, but let out a ear-piercing scream and raised my rifle. It pounced towards me, teeth gleaming like deaths own scythe. My finger pressed against the cold harsh trigger, My future released through the barrel.
The end.
Hope you like it.
Please post thoughts <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo-->
I was lost, slowly being digested by the multitude of dark decaying tunnels that had lured so many helpless victims. I could feel the fear, plagueing my blood, pumping around my veins until it had consumed my vulnerable shell.
The team had been wiped out, and with it, any hope of being blasted off this poisonous planet.
During the confusion of the attack, i fell down a manhole, the darkness evading my mind, attacking my bravery and emphasising my isolation.
My ammo was low aswell as my self-confidence. The concoction of Alien Screams and Human slaughter fuelled my paranoia, the end was nigh.
Soon my shoulder lamp would decline in light, and with it my chances of survival. My hands gripped my rifle, my soul, my fortress. Finger on the cold, merciless trigger, I hoped to god I would not have to press it.
Luck was not on my side. As I narrowed my eyes, the shape came into focus. It stared straight into my eyes, searching for my fate and eradicating my future. My life did not flash before me, nor did I freeze, but let out a ear-piercing scream and raised my rifle. It pounced towards me, teeth gleaming like deaths own scythe. My finger pressed against the cold harsh trigger, My future released through the barrel.
The end.
Comments
That's some mighty fine story-telling, very emotive. Encore!
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Thanks alot mate.
"The team had been wiped out, and with it, any hope <u><b>out</u></b> being blasted off this poisonous planet."
Shouldn't that be written as 'any hope <u><b>of</u></b> being blasted off this poisonous planet.
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