The Superior
tehwooty
Join Date: 2003-07-08 Member: 18024Members
Join Date: 2003-07-08 Member: 18024Members
<div class="IPBDescription">Just my first story. First post too...</div> <u>The Superior</u>
Instincts, wordless thoughts raced through the creature's subconscious, a large portion of it controlled by the mysterious hive mind. A flurry of electrical signals relayed to it through the thick layer of bacteria covering the whole colony, instructed it to kill. Kill them all. The creature, oblivious to it's slavery under the hive mind, immediately proceeded with the plan. Swiftly dodging obstacles and maintaining a constant pace. The sound of his gutteral noises and his claws lightly tapping the ground, a beautiful symphony with perfect timing and rhythm, the dog-sized creature made its way around the colony, drifting in the Void that is known to the alien bipeds as "space."
Thoughts non-existant, this hunter was a mindless one, the most dangerous of all. One that knew no mercy for the most pitiful creatures, one that knew no pain and suffering, no death, just rebirth. One that was so relentless that the mere music of it's movement struck fear into the hearts of the aliens, for it signified the coming of death, mayhem, and chaos, qualities despised by most of the other weak races conquered by the Great Bacteria. Instead, the Kharaa basked and thrived in the greantess and beauty of such things. These things demonstrated true power and superiority. One who was strong and dominant in chaos was the strongest.
Suddenly, the creature stopped dead in its tracks, and swiftly leaped to the nearest wall, climbing to the ceiling. It hid among the numerous wires and other obstructions as the sound of heavy boots against strong metal intensified, signifying the nearing of the aliens. The skulk immediately knew how to deal with its current situation. The crackling noise of something the aliens called a "raydeeo" or some other such odd instrument, was heard, and their Leader gave them a set of instructions.
A memory suddenly appeared in the creature's thoughts, an image of the things it had slain before this very moment, a rememberance of the hundreds, thousands of cowards who had fallen before this creature who was about to add several new members to this memory. It felt a void from within, one that was supposed to be satisfied by the only thing it knew, killing. But with every fallen enemy, the void seemed to grow larger.
Along with the sound of the boots hitting the metal floor, the stench of the bipeds much more intense as they approached. Suddenly, a head popped into view right under the skulk, as it looked down, and prepared itself for the thirst quenching liquid called human blood.
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-wooty
Instincts, wordless thoughts raced through the creature's subconscious, a large portion of it controlled by the mysterious hive mind. A flurry of electrical signals relayed to it through the thick layer of bacteria covering the whole colony, instructed it to kill. Kill them all. The creature, oblivious to it's slavery under the hive mind, immediately proceeded with the plan. Swiftly dodging obstacles and maintaining a constant pace. The sound of his gutteral noises and his claws lightly tapping the ground, a beautiful symphony with perfect timing and rhythm, the dog-sized creature made its way around the colony, drifting in the Void that is known to the alien bipeds as "space."
Thoughts non-existant, this hunter was a mindless one, the most dangerous of all. One that knew no mercy for the most pitiful creatures, one that knew no pain and suffering, no death, just rebirth. One that was so relentless that the mere music of it's movement struck fear into the hearts of the aliens, for it signified the coming of death, mayhem, and chaos, qualities despised by most of the other weak races conquered by the Great Bacteria. Instead, the Kharaa basked and thrived in the greantess and beauty of such things. These things demonstrated true power and superiority. One who was strong and dominant in chaos was the strongest.
Suddenly, the creature stopped dead in its tracks, and swiftly leaped to the nearest wall, climbing to the ceiling. It hid among the numerous wires and other obstructions as the sound of heavy boots against strong metal intensified, signifying the nearing of the aliens. The skulk immediately knew how to deal with its current situation. The crackling noise of something the aliens called a "raydeeo" or some other such odd instrument, was heard, and their Leader gave them a set of instructions.
A memory suddenly appeared in the creature's thoughts, an image of the things it had slain before this very moment, a rememberance of the hundreds, thousands of cowards who had fallen before this creature who was about to add several new members to this memory. It felt a void from within, one that was supposed to be satisfied by the only thing it knew, killing. But with every fallen enemy, the void seemed to grow larger.
Along with the sound of the boots hitting the metal floor, the stench of the bipeds much more intense as they approached. Suddenly, a head popped into view right under the skulk, as it looked down, and prepared itself for the thirst quenching liquid called human blood.
<b>If you like this, PLEASE POST FEEDBACK (I know That Annoying Kid will <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif'><!--endemo-->) otherwise I won't do a second chapter</b>
-wooty
Comments
welcome to the forums!
It's nice to see a sudden rush of kharaa perspectived fan-fics
I would most definetly like to see this story continued
where do you imagin this story to be taking place?
I see it as taking place by the corridor from cargo bay hive to great viaduct right by that vent above the resnode
Personally, I see it as the hall on eclipse from CC to the marine start, you know the long hall ways there? Well there's wires and crap there so that's how I visualized it.
Glad you enjoyed it, gonna work on chapter 2 when I'm in the mood...
-wooty
It's nice to see how the writer imagines there story and how the reader percieves it
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2 claws with bullets in em up!!! <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif'><!--endemo--> <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif'><!--endemo--> <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif'><!--endemo--> <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif'><!--endemo-->
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if the skulks is a mindless automotan that does the hives bidding how does it know that the liquid is human blood?
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-wooty
The two marines proceeded down the hallway, all the while being stalked by their hunter. They turned at an intersection and were obviously sent to limit the resource intake of the Kharaa since there was a Collector down the hall they were going. The skulk received several more subconscious orders. Unknown to the aliens, their trip to oblivion was near...
The hallway was mildly round, making it easier for the skulk to dodge their machine gun fire. It let itself swiftly slide down the wall of the hall, retracting its claws as to make no noise. At the base of the curve, it leaped high into the air, smashing into the back of one of the marines. Startled, his partner immediately turned around and emptied a clip into his squadmate. Smoke mingled with flowing blood poured out of the rather thick marine armour.
The realisation of what he had done hit him in the face harder than the small body of the skulk did before the corpse of the first soldier hit the cold floor, causing a resounding thud, the last sound the helpless marine would hear before his end.
<b>Just finished part two, comments welcome/needed</b>
-wooty
Otherwise two appendages up!!! <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif'><!--endemo--> <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif'><!--endemo-->