Colony 9
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Join Date: 2003-02-08 Member: 13287Members
Join Date: 2003-02-08 Member: 13287Members
<div class="IPBDescription">Chapter 1</div> Taylor felt something prod him in the side. He opened his eyes and looked around and saw Barry's face looking down at him.
"Yeah?" He questioned Barry.
"Well, they made the emergency call…looks like they'll be needing us after all."
"Hmm…come on let's suit up and go."
They both put on their light armor and strapped on the med packs. Then, they started on their way to the surface. They didn't say anything as they landed in the eerie docking pay. The hydraulics in the door whirred as the hatch in front of them opened. They peered around inside of the structure for a while.
"Well we gonna get going?" Barry asked. Taylor responded by stepping out into the building. It was in ruins. There was vegetation growing on the crumbling walls.
"Hard to believe people lived here once," he whispered.
"Did you manage to find the location of the distress beacon?" Taylor asked.
"Yeah, they should be on the bottom floor."
"Well let's get going." They walked slowly, like everyone does in a place that they find scary. They would both stop in their tracks at the crack of a twig or any other foreign noise. On the 2nd floor they heard a strange, unearthly growl.
"What the hell was that?" Barry whimpered.
"Probably just an animal. Let's keep moving."
"What if it's those things?!?" Barry was getting hysterical. Taylor pumped his shotgun and creeped up on the origin of the growl. There was nothing there.
"See? Nothing to be afraid of." Taylor turned around. Barry had a relieved look on his face, but Taylor certainly did not. There was a tentacle hovering over Barry's head. Barry seeing the expression, and where Taylor was looking, turned around. He screamed as the thing grabbed him and sucked him into a hole.
"****!" Taylor screamed as he ran over to the hole. There was some gelatin like stuff covering the hole. Taylor kicked it but it just wiggled. "Good thing I brought this along," he said as he pulled out some plastic explosives. He stuck them onto the jelly and ran behind the pillar. He pressed the detonator and heard a sick splattering noise. "Here goes nothing." And he flung himself down the tube after Barry.
"Yeah?" He questioned Barry.
"Well, they made the emergency call…looks like they'll be needing us after all."
"Hmm…come on let's suit up and go."
They both put on their light armor and strapped on the med packs. Then, they started on their way to the surface. They didn't say anything as they landed in the eerie docking pay. The hydraulics in the door whirred as the hatch in front of them opened. They peered around inside of the structure for a while.
"Well we gonna get going?" Barry asked. Taylor responded by stepping out into the building. It was in ruins. There was vegetation growing on the crumbling walls.
"Hard to believe people lived here once," he whispered.
"Did you manage to find the location of the distress beacon?" Taylor asked.
"Yeah, they should be on the bottom floor."
"Well let's get going." They walked slowly, like everyone does in a place that they find scary. They would both stop in their tracks at the crack of a twig or any other foreign noise. On the 2nd floor they heard a strange, unearthly growl.
"What the hell was that?" Barry whimpered.
"Probably just an animal. Let's keep moving."
"What if it's those things?!?" Barry was getting hysterical. Taylor pumped his shotgun and creeped up on the origin of the growl. There was nothing there.
"See? Nothing to be afraid of." Taylor turned around. Barry had a relieved look on his face, but Taylor certainly did not. There was a tentacle hovering over Barry's head. Barry seeing the expression, and where Taylor was looking, turned around. He screamed as the thing grabbed him and sucked him into a hole.
"****!" Taylor screamed as he ran over to the hole. There was some gelatin like stuff covering the hole. Taylor kicked it but it just wiggled. "Good thing I brought this along," he said as he pulled out some plastic explosives. He stuck them onto the jelly and ran behind the pillar. He pressed the detonator and heard a sick splattering noise. "Here goes nothing." And he flung himself down the tube after Barry.
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a hint from the fan-fic veteran (this is something i've discovered)
PARAGRAPHS ARE YOU FRIENDS!
thats my only suggestion
a hint from the fan-fic veteran (this is something i've discovered)
PARAGRAPHS ARE YOU FRIENDS!
thats my only suggestion <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><span class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
Tell me how to use the tab key on these forums and I'll do it. This story was orignally spaced out but the forums and their stupid auto correct fixed it. And what does TS stand for?
this is a long story with no paragraphs in it: a;oitulhjnzluhucmuiht,uhnfgulhn\ua;oitulhjnzluhucmuiht,uhnfgulhn\ua;oitulhjnzluhucmuiht,uhnfgulhn\ua;oitulhjnzluhucmuiht,uhnfgulhn\ua;oitulhjnzluhucmuiht,uhnfgulhn\ua;oitulhjnzluhucmuiht,uhnfgulhn\ua;oitulhjnzluhucmuiht,uhnfgulhn\ua;oitulhjnzluhucmuiht,uhnfgulhn\ua;oitulhjnzluhucmuiht,uhnfgulhn\ua;oitulhjnzluhucmuiht,uhnfgulhn\u
(i really coulnd't be a**d to type something realy
ths is the same long story but with paragraphs: a;oitulhjnzluhucmuiht,uhnfgulhn\ua;oitulhjnzluhucmuiht,uhnfgulhn\ua;oitulhjnzluhucmuiht,uhnfgulhn\u
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see? much easier
Just put a
like so, it should space it out
(edit post=trial and error=w1nna)