My Second Story
Kuroneko
Join Date: 2002-11-05 Member: 7184Members, Constellation
Join Date: 2002-11-05 Member: 7184Members, Constellation
<div class="IPBDescription">yeah I know I'm a n00b, but it's decent</div> I acctually wrote all of this on my palm pilot during finals <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo--> see how useful public education is?
"Lets see, insert OS disk, and wait for it to boot, right?" Hans mumbles to himself as he starts up the Comm Chair. "This is simple, right? Drop in a few Infantry portals, an armory and send 'em out."
He drops them in and the marines quickly rush to them and get them set up in no time flat. "darnit, darnit, darnit!!! I hate it in here, it's so small and cramped!"
The CommChair's door flys open and the marines turn around thinking an alien is trying to break into the CC. They see only Hans crawling out, covered in sweat and panting heavily. "I can't do this..." he says in a weak voice. "It's ok Hans, it's ok." his friend Will tells him "Someone else can take comm".
Will: So, what happened in there?
Hans: I'm not sure, just got the shakes real bad..
Will: This won't affect your normal opperations, will it?
Hans: No sir.
Will: Right then, grab your LMG and get out with the rest of them.
Hans runs out the left door to join the others at horseshoe. "Why am I even here? I hate this..." He asks himself as he runs down the hallway. At a small junction, Hans stops to catch his breath.
A scratching sound echos through the junction. Hans picks up his LMG and begins looking around hastily. "Sh*t...where the f*ck is it?" He hears a sound behind him so he whips around and empties his clip. Now, drenched in sweat, he stands there shaking. A growl echos from the vent, and a skulk emerges. Hans stares the skulk in the eyes, he pulls the trigger only to hear a *click* from the gun. The skulk continues to approach him, Hans drops his gun and cowers in fear. The skulk spits at him, then takes off back into the vent.
About an hour later the marines find Hans in an alcove still shaking and sweating. "C'mon Hans, get up and lets get back to base." 2 marines help him up and they arive at base shortly after.
"What the... what happened to you Hans?" asked Will. "Not sure, I feel really wierd..." Hans replied. "We better get you back to the dropship" Will finished.
Hans gets into the phase gate and Will activates the sequence. Suddenly several alarms go off "WARNNG! UNKOWN ORGANISM IN PHASE GATE!" The phase gate begun to shut off after the message sounded. "What the h*ll??" Will exclaims. "Why won't this d*mn thing work?!?"
"Uhhhgg.." Hans rolls off the phase. "I'm not feeling too well..". "What's wrong?" replied Will. "I feel....odd..." Hans mumbled. "Well, just go get in one of the cabins here. I'm sure you'll be fine." ordered Will. Will supported Hans with his shoulder as they walked down the hallway. A tapping noise came from the vent above them, Will froze in his tracks. "Did you hear that Hans?" Hans didn't reply, he was out cold. "darnit Hans..."
Will hit the button, and the door before him opened. He dragged Hans in and layed him out on the bed. "darnit, he needs a doctor, but they're too scared to come aboard an infected craft." A chuckle came from behind him, he whipped around and drew up his pistol at the sound.
"Hey man, put that thing down!" yelled Scott "I ain't gonna kill you!" "Oh, it's just you." Will said in a sigh of relief "I thought one of those things got in here." Scott laughed and pat his machine gun "Not on my watch! Lets get back to the drop zone, we need to reorganize." "Yeah, I guess so." Will said reluctantly.
Over the voice comm an exciting message sounded "Command, do you hear me? This is Gamma Team!" "This is command, what is your status?" "Sir, we found thier...erm..thing..we think it's thier breeding area or something." "Any hostiles in your area?" "None detected sir." "Alright, I'll drop you some ammo and you get to work on that thing!" "Over and out! Yeehaw!"
All 4 men opened fire on it, shell caseings covered the floor and the echos of gunfire rang throughout the halls. A crash of metal was heard during the panic and shards of metal fell onto the marines "What the...!!" The marines focused on thier new targets, whatever they were. Soon, new yells were heard on the comm "Sh*t!!! Drop us some heal--" the communication was cut short and replaced with static.
"Status! What the h*ll is going on?" screamed Will. "We've just lost contact with Gamma Team." replied the commander "Where were they?" "They did not report thier position, but they had found thier breeding area." "Thier what?! They're breeding on this ship?" replied Will with amazment "Yes, and it appears that there are even more of those things than before." "Recall all teams, get them back to the drop zone...NOW!" demanded Will, he needed to get this all sorted out. This is no longer just a clean up opperation.
"Ok men, it appears that we're going to have to switch gears a bit. The enemy is based on this ship" a murmer rose up from the crowd of 38 marines. "We're going to need heavier weapons, and we need them quickly. I have ordered the drop ship to send 6 HA suits, and 14 jump packs for our use. Also, they will be sending 3 siege cannons, 19 HMGs, as well as 3 grenade launchers." "We're going to kill them ****!!!" came a voice from the crowd "Now calm down! Don't get too cocky, these things can out manuver us very easily and even travel the vents faster than we can." "So, whats the plan?" "We're going to send out 3 jumppack parties to search for that breeding nest, then once it's found, HA and standard marines will move in to setup siege cannons."
30 mins later all the men were assembled in the drop zones. The jumppackers took off and began thier search. The next 15mins were tense. Finally, a call came in from one of the jumppack teams "We've found it, we've found them ****'s breedin' grounds! It's in the power substation." "Alright men, you heard 'em. Get your equipment and start movin' out." commanded Will. The men hustled as they ran around gathering up thier stuff. Suddenly, another call came through "Sir! Sir! We've found thier breeding place. We're currently at the main ventilation shaft." "WHAT?! They have more than one? OK, we'll procede as planned and take out the first one, then we'll goto that second one. "Yes sir!"
The team moved out from the drop zone and proceded towards the power substation. Due to the siege cannons and HA suits, the team moved slowly. "Look out!" one of the aliens came dashing down the corridor and sliced at one of the marines, killing him. One of the others turned and unloaded onto the alien. "Damn...those things are fast.." said one of the marines "Deadly too..." added another. "We're almost to that breeding spot, lets keep moving."
Once they arrived outside of the breeding spot, Will gave them thier orders "You 3, watch that door, don't let any of them enter! You 2, keep a close eye on the vents. The rest of ya, get those cannons online, this puppie is goin' down." The men saluted and went to thier posts. It wasn't easy, odd sloshing sounds came from various directions, scratches on metal, odd chuckling noises. None of the men could totaly concentrate on thier tasks. "Cannons online!" cried one of the marines "Good work men. Comm! Ping the room to our south." A high pitched beep sound was heard and the siege cannons began to turn. Suddenly, the stopped, locked in position, and began to fire.
Screams and roars could be heard from inside the room inbetween the explosions. The marines began to cheer, all believed they were done with this one, when 6 aliens came crashing through the door. They were screaching at the marines and slashing at them. A new type of alien appeared, taller and darker than the rest. It had a long blade instead of just a claw. It took a swipe at one of the marines and took his head clean off. The HA marine changed his aim to that alien and fired 80 rounds directly into it, the alien didn't survive.
"D*mnit, why can't this madness just end? And what the h*ll was that thing?" exlaimed Will "Comm! Drop us a few medpacks" 6 medpacks appeared on the ground in a shimmer of light. The men walked over and pluged thier suits into the packs. "Well, I guess this place is done, time to move into the next. Comm, is everything good at base?" "Well, I've seen a bit of movement, nothing the turrets can't handle."
"Copy that, what is Hans' status?" "He's stable now, still not awake." "Well thats better than he was before. OK, Will out."
The men began packing up thier stuff and getting ready to move to the next point. One of the siege cannons had become to damaged to use, one of the legs had sheared off. The nanites consumed it so it was not wasted. o now, down a man and with only 2 siege cannons, they moved to the main ventilation shaft.
The walk there was uneventful, not even a strange noise from vents. Some of the men got antsy and almost afrad of having nothing to be afraid of. Will tried to keep thier spirits up by singing, but only got booed at when he started. "Aw, comeon. Like any of you are better?" "Well, I worked in the theater for a few years." replied a marine. Will instantly shutup and decided that perhaps signing wasn't a good way to pass time right now.
When they finially arrived, they looked for a good area to siege from. They only had to fit 2 cannons, so that helped a bit. Will decided on a small vent shaft that led off from the main, it would be easy to defend, but near impossible to retreat from if under attack. Once the cannons were online he contacted the commander "Comm, ping the main vent shaft!" he got no responce "Comm? d*mnit, we must be outside radio range. Smith, go in there and spot for the cannons" Smith saluted and moved out. The cannons began to turn to aquire thier targets, and fired. For a solid 2 minutes the fired at that place, bu no screams, no roars, not a sound but explosions from from inside the shaft.
The cannons stopped. "Sir! It's gone! It's gone!" Smith yelled. "Good work men, lets get going back home!" for the final time they packed up the cannons, with smiles on thier faces bigger than this entire station. The men even hostered thier weapons as they moved back to base, not a care in the world. "When I get back, I'm gunna jump right in bed with my wife!" one of the men joked "Wife? Who needs one, I'm just gonna get a couple of women, and jump in bed with them!" All the men were having a good time on the way back.
The hit the airlock button to get into the dropzone, but when they walked in they were not longer excited. "What the h*ll happened?!" yelled one of the marines. Thier entire base had been demolished, not a single structure left standing. "Ohhh sh*t.." "We gotta get out of here guys, NOW" ordered Will. The men began to move back to the airlock when they felt a rumble in the ground "What's that?" "A new alien?" The airlock's door blew off and a head poked through. A boney plate covered it's head, and a large set of teeth below it. Almost twice as tall as the HA suits, it towered obove the marines. "Shoot it d*mnit! SHOOT IT!" exclaimed a marine. All of them opened fire expending thier entire clips on it, but it barely phased the creature.
"We did fairly well, didn't we?" "Yeah, I wasn't expecting to win this one, d*mn near lost." "Well, that last move was pure luck, still great to watch." "Too true, too true" "Well, we got to get that other Hive built, only 3 is too risky." "Yeah, I'll go do that, make sure none of those bipods get on here again tho, ok?" "Sure, no problem"
THE END..
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"Lets see, insert OS disk, and wait for it to boot, right?" Hans mumbles to himself as he starts up the Comm Chair. "This is simple, right? Drop in a few Infantry portals, an armory and send 'em out."
He drops them in and the marines quickly rush to them and get them set up in no time flat. "darnit, darnit, darnit!!! I hate it in here, it's so small and cramped!"
The CommChair's door flys open and the marines turn around thinking an alien is trying to break into the CC. They see only Hans crawling out, covered in sweat and panting heavily. "I can't do this..." he says in a weak voice. "It's ok Hans, it's ok." his friend Will tells him "Someone else can take comm".
Will: So, what happened in there?
Hans: I'm not sure, just got the shakes real bad..
Will: This won't affect your normal opperations, will it?
Hans: No sir.
Will: Right then, grab your LMG and get out with the rest of them.
Hans runs out the left door to join the others at horseshoe. "Why am I even here? I hate this..." He asks himself as he runs down the hallway. At a small junction, Hans stops to catch his breath.
A scratching sound echos through the junction. Hans picks up his LMG and begins looking around hastily. "Sh*t...where the f*ck is it?" He hears a sound behind him so he whips around and empties his clip. Now, drenched in sweat, he stands there shaking. A growl echos from the vent, and a skulk emerges. Hans stares the skulk in the eyes, he pulls the trigger only to hear a *click* from the gun. The skulk continues to approach him, Hans drops his gun and cowers in fear. The skulk spits at him, then takes off back into the vent.
About an hour later the marines find Hans in an alcove still shaking and sweating. "C'mon Hans, get up and lets get back to base." 2 marines help him up and they arive at base shortly after.
"What the... what happened to you Hans?" asked Will. "Not sure, I feel really wierd..." Hans replied. "We better get you back to the dropship" Will finished.
Hans gets into the phase gate and Will activates the sequence. Suddenly several alarms go off "WARNNG! UNKOWN ORGANISM IN PHASE GATE!" The phase gate begun to shut off after the message sounded. "What the h*ll??" Will exclaims. "Why won't this d*mn thing work?!?"
"Uhhhgg.." Hans rolls off the phase. "I'm not feeling too well..". "What's wrong?" replied Will. "I feel....odd..." Hans mumbled. "Well, just go get in one of the cabins here. I'm sure you'll be fine." ordered Will. Will supported Hans with his shoulder as they walked down the hallway. A tapping noise came from the vent above them, Will froze in his tracks. "Did you hear that Hans?" Hans didn't reply, he was out cold. "darnit Hans..."
Will hit the button, and the door before him opened. He dragged Hans in and layed him out on the bed. "darnit, he needs a doctor, but they're too scared to come aboard an infected craft." A chuckle came from behind him, he whipped around and drew up his pistol at the sound.
"Hey man, put that thing down!" yelled Scott "I ain't gonna kill you!" "Oh, it's just you." Will said in a sigh of relief "I thought one of those things got in here." Scott laughed and pat his machine gun "Not on my watch! Lets get back to the drop zone, we need to reorganize." "Yeah, I guess so." Will said reluctantly.
Over the voice comm an exciting message sounded "Command, do you hear me? This is Gamma Team!" "This is command, what is your status?" "Sir, we found thier...erm..thing..we think it's thier breeding area or something." "Any hostiles in your area?" "None detected sir." "Alright, I'll drop you some ammo and you get to work on that thing!" "Over and out! Yeehaw!"
All 4 men opened fire on it, shell caseings covered the floor and the echos of gunfire rang throughout the halls. A crash of metal was heard during the panic and shards of metal fell onto the marines "What the...!!" The marines focused on thier new targets, whatever they were. Soon, new yells were heard on the comm "Sh*t!!! Drop us some heal--" the communication was cut short and replaced with static.
"Status! What the h*ll is going on?" screamed Will. "We've just lost contact with Gamma Team." replied the commander "Where were they?" "They did not report thier position, but they had found thier breeding area." "Thier what?! They're breeding on this ship?" replied Will with amazment "Yes, and it appears that there are even more of those things than before." "Recall all teams, get them back to the drop zone...NOW!" demanded Will, he needed to get this all sorted out. This is no longer just a clean up opperation.
"Ok men, it appears that we're going to have to switch gears a bit. The enemy is based on this ship" a murmer rose up from the crowd of 38 marines. "We're going to need heavier weapons, and we need them quickly. I have ordered the drop ship to send 6 HA suits, and 14 jump packs for our use. Also, they will be sending 3 siege cannons, 19 HMGs, as well as 3 grenade launchers." "We're going to kill them ****!!!" came a voice from the crowd "Now calm down! Don't get too cocky, these things can out manuver us very easily and even travel the vents faster than we can." "So, whats the plan?" "We're going to send out 3 jumppack parties to search for that breeding nest, then once it's found, HA and standard marines will move in to setup siege cannons."
30 mins later all the men were assembled in the drop zones. The jumppackers took off and began thier search. The next 15mins were tense. Finally, a call came in from one of the jumppack teams "We've found it, we've found them ****'s breedin' grounds! It's in the power substation." "Alright men, you heard 'em. Get your equipment and start movin' out." commanded Will. The men hustled as they ran around gathering up thier stuff. Suddenly, another call came through "Sir! Sir! We've found thier breeding place. We're currently at the main ventilation shaft." "WHAT?! They have more than one? OK, we'll procede as planned and take out the first one, then we'll goto that second one. "Yes sir!"
The team moved out from the drop zone and proceded towards the power substation. Due to the siege cannons and HA suits, the team moved slowly. "Look out!" one of the aliens came dashing down the corridor and sliced at one of the marines, killing him. One of the others turned and unloaded onto the alien. "Damn...those things are fast.." said one of the marines "Deadly too..." added another. "We're almost to that breeding spot, lets keep moving."
Once they arrived outside of the breeding spot, Will gave them thier orders "You 3, watch that door, don't let any of them enter! You 2, keep a close eye on the vents. The rest of ya, get those cannons online, this puppie is goin' down." The men saluted and went to thier posts. It wasn't easy, odd sloshing sounds came from various directions, scratches on metal, odd chuckling noises. None of the men could totaly concentrate on thier tasks. "Cannons online!" cried one of the marines "Good work men. Comm! Ping the room to our south." A high pitched beep sound was heard and the siege cannons began to turn. Suddenly, the stopped, locked in position, and began to fire.
Screams and roars could be heard from inside the room inbetween the explosions. The marines began to cheer, all believed they were done with this one, when 6 aliens came crashing through the door. They were screaching at the marines and slashing at them. A new type of alien appeared, taller and darker than the rest. It had a long blade instead of just a claw. It took a swipe at one of the marines and took his head clean off. The HA marine changed his aim to that alien and fired 80 rounds directly into it, the alien didn't survive.
"D*mnit, why can't this madness just end? And what the h*ll was that thing?" exlaimed Will "Comm! Drop us a few medpacks" 6 medpacks appeared on the ground in a shimmer of light. The men walked over and pluged thier suits into the packs. "Well, I guess this place is done, time to move into the next. Comm, is everything good at base?" "Well, I've seen a bit of movement, nothing the turrets can't handle."
"Copy that, what is Hans' status?" "He's stable now, still not awake." "Well thats better than he was before. OK, Will out."
The men began packing up thier stuff and getting ready to move to the next point. One of the siege cannons had become to damaged to use, one of the legs had sheared off. The nanites consumed it so it was not wasted. o now, down a man and with only 2 siege cannons, they moved to the main ventilation shaft.
The walk there was uneventful, not even a strange noise from vents. Some of the men got antsy and almost afrad of having nothing to be afraid of. Will tried to keep thier spirits up by singing, but only got booed at when he started. "Aw, comeon. Like any of you are better?" "Well, I worked in the theater for a few years." replied a marine. Will instantly shutup and decided that perhaps signing wasn't a good way to pass time right now.
When they finially arrived, they looked for a good area to siege from. They only had to fit 2 cannons, so that helped a bit. Will decided on a small vent shaft that led off from the main, it would be easy to defend, but near impossible to retreat from if under attack. Once the cannons were online he contacted the commander "Comm, ping the main vent shaft!" he got no responce "Comm? d*mnit, we must be outside radio range. Smith, go in there and spot for the cannons" Smith saluted and moved out. The cannons began to turn to aquire thier targets, and fired. For a solid 2 minutes the fired at that place, bu no screams, no roars, not a sound but explosions from from inside the shaft.
The cannons stopped. "Sir! It's gone! It's gone!" Smith yelled. "Good work men, lets get going back home!" for the final time they packed up the cannons, with smiles on thier faces bigger than this entire station. The men even hostered thier weapons as they moved back to base, not a care in the world. "When I get back, I'm gunna jump right in bed with my wife!" one of the men joked "Wife? Who needs one, I'm just gonna get a couple of women, and jump in bed with them!" All the men were having a good time on the way back.
The hit the airlock button to get into the dropzone, but when they walked in they were not longer excited. "What the h*ll happened?!" yelled one of the marines. Thier entire base had been demolished, not a single structure left standing. "Ohhh sh*t.." "We gotta get out of here guys, NOW" ordered Will. The men began to move back to the airlock when they felt a rumble in the ground "What's that?" "A new alien?" The airlock's door blew off and a head poked through. A boney plate covered it's head, and a large set of teeth below it. Almost twice as tall as the HA suits, it towered obove the marines. "Shoot it d*mnit! SHOOT IT!" exclaimed a marine. All of them opened fire expending thier entire clips on it, but it barely phased the creature.
"We did fairly well, didn't we?" "Yeah, I wasn't expecting to win this one, d*mn near lost." "Well, that last move was pure luck, still great to watch." "Too true, too true" "Well, we got to get that other Hive built, only 3 is too risky." "Yeah, I'll go do that, make sure none of those bipods get on here again tho, ok?" "Sure, no problem"
THE END..
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so it's like a story, but at the end its just like what happened in the game <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo-->
nice story!
it would be nice if you had developed your story more, just added a little bit about the background of the characters, the part about carrying the seige cannons was intersting, and I'm guessing in the end you were speaking from the kharaa POV.
nice work
And about the POV at the end: unless marines build hives, yeah.
marines DO build hives
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marines DO build hives
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OMG...thats gotta be fixed in 1.1 never seen it happen, and i hope i never do.
LMAO
to true
hopefully it will be fixed
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LMAO, the end for the marines
I just noticed that, nice touch
and public education is very usefull, I'm posting on forums during public speaking, oh and it's senior ditch day, and there are maybe 20 senior on the entire campus, out of 600 <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo-->