Cronos Introduction Mk2

S_T_A_R_S_BarryS_T_A_R_S_Barry Join Date: 2003-03-17 Member: 14624Members
edited April 2003 in Fan-Fiction Forum
<div class="IPBDescription">spellcheked version</div> There where ten of them lined up in military fashion backs strait arms held behind them, unlike the rookies who stood stock still trying to show the commander how hard they could look these where standing differently as if, as if they saw things in your mind things you didn't want other people to know things that where for you and for you alone. As a weapon designer Barry had seen a few years in combat mainly peace keeping duties, the commander of the team had put him up for promotions as he seemed to be able to convert old conventional weapons into something different.
He had made his big jump through the ranks when he saved his team on orlias 5. He used his knowledge of the conventional MM-26 grenade launcher and the phase gate to great use.

The squad was being over run by rebels some one had to have been helping them; they couldn't get armed like this could they? They had lost transmissions to several squads already and the number of reports was dropping fast. None of the ships in orbit where in range to give them evac, they had a few sieges up he had upgraded the observatory to movement tracking, the commander said that this would make him general someday, Barry didn't believe him? The siege guns he had linked into the observatory from his view point he could see them firing there sonic blasts off into the riot below, allot of the people hit didn't die on impact but the landing certainly did, the sieges where knocking them flying either into burning houses and occasionally which in a sick way was funny, 200 feet in the air. He knew that sooner or later they would come up the hill and over whelm them.

"Barry you got any idea"
The crackling of the voice COM showed that there was definite EMS some where in the city, who had armed them?
"Yes sir I have an idea but its going to cost us quite bit of our remaining resources"
"Will it save us?"
Barry stared hard into the fray he could see a few marine helmets on poles he hoped there wasn't heads inside them.
"Barry? You still there?"
"Yes yes sorry just thinking it might work it just might"
"Ok anything better than waiting for an angry mob to club us to death"
Just then one of the sieges exploded
"HOLY CRAP that was sonic they have sieges, I'm getting the other 2 to target."
There was an explosion somewhere in the town
"Damn that's one down ok what do you need Barry?"
"A grenade launcher and a jet pack sir"
"Ok I'm beaming the stuff over to you now"
What he requested was beamed in front of him, Barry put on the Jet pack clipping the belt around him and giving it a testing tug to make sure it was secure. He picked up the grenade launcher and opened the magazine
"What are you doing Barry? Those clips cost a fortune in nanosludge"
"Sir do you want me to save your **** or not?"
"Ok ok carry on but I ain't paying the bill"
Barry ignored the comment and went over to phase gate and began unscrewing the Translocater coils
"BARRY WHAT THE HELL DO YOU THINK YOUR DOING THATS GONA COST US BIG TIME THE OTHER SQUADS CANT BEAM IN NOW"
"What other squads would they be sir"
The COM link went silent for a while
"I ain't paying the bill"
"Ok sir its ready" Barry has emptied the clip of its standard explosive rounds and had don a few modification with the barrel which he was sure was going to work he clipped his slightly larger than normal clip into the slot and loaded the first shell.
"Now what do we do Barry?"
"I fly you sit and watch the fireworks"
Barry activated the jet packs thrusters and flew over the crowed he saw tracers missing him by inches; he was feeling this wasn't such a good idea any more.

He paced the room one more time and looked each of the men up and down, he cleared his thought and said

"Welcome to the cronos project you have been selected for specialist training in the field of quantum mechanics any who do not wish to proceed takes a step back now."

No one did he let out a sigh of relief all of these veterans where needed if his project was to succeed, now the game had began and he held the aces.

Comments

  • GwahirGwahir Join Date: 2002-04-24 Member: 513Members, Constellation
    there are still several things in there that annoy me. Where for were, etc. And I did have to re-read sections to try to determine what was said
  • That_Annoying_KidThat_Annoying_Kid Sire of Titles Join Date: 2003-03-01 Member: 14175Members, Constellation
    *rampant applause*
    MS word isn't exactly the best spell checker... Macintosh is show as a spelling error, while microsoft is automatically capitalized, so beh (Thats meh+bah)
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    and I liked the "spellcheked" pun
    when is the next part going up?
  • S_T_A_R_S_BarryS_T_A_R_S_Barry Join Date: 2003-03-17 Member: 14624Members
    all i can say is its going to be delayed as i am writing OIL WARS the president striked back
  • Lumberjack_WannabeLumberjack_Wannabe Join Date: 2003-03-11 Member: 14404Members, Constellation
    <!--QuoteBegin--S.T.A.R.S. Barry+Apr 6 2003, 10:25 AM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (S.T.A.R.S. Barry @ Apr 6 2003, 10:25 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> Barry activated the jet packs thrusters and flew over the crowed he saw tracers missing him by inches; he was feeling this wasn't such a good idea any more.

    He paced the room one more time and looked each of the men up and down, he cleared his thought and said

    "Welcome to the cronos project you have been selected for specialist training in the field of quantum mechanics any who do not wish to proceed takes a step back now."

    No one did he let out a sigh of relief all of these veterans where needed if his project was to succeed, now the game had began and he held the aces. <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><span class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
    I don't get the transition from the action to another part/time/place. Maybe a hint to the next chapter?
  • That_Annoying_KidThat_Annoying_Kid Sire of Titles Join Date: 2003-03-01 Member: 14175Members, Constellation
    <!--QuoteBegin--S.T.A.R.S. Barry+Apr 7 2003, 10:57 AM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (S.T.A.R.S. Barry @ Apr 7 2003, 10:57 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> all i can say is its going to be delayed as i am writing OIL WARS the president striked back <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><span class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
    that just sounds funny as is....hehehe
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    oh well, take your time
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