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DarkATiDarkATi Revelation 22:17Members, Reinforced - Shadow Join Date: 2003-06-20 Member: 17532Posts: 2,545 Fully active user
Would You Sign Me?
Looking for some crit on my latest audio work. I'm trying to make it in a solo career... so sick of bands, be brutally honest, however, "I don't like that kind of music" isn't acceptable because it doesn't help me improve it any.

To answer a few questions before they're asked:

1. Yes I am playing the guitar part.
2. Yes Drums and Bass will be added in later. For now just judge what's there.

Song: W*A*N*T*E*D (First Verse)

http://mappers.riseofpower.net/WANTEDverse1.mp3

Song: October (First Verse)

http://mappers.riseofpower.net/october-verse1.mp3

Song: Four Days Love (First Verse) I AM NOT PLAYING THIS GUITAR PART

http://mappers.riseofpower.net/Four%20Days%20Love4.mp3

*Appreciate the honesty in advance. smile-fix.gif

~ DarkATi

Comments

  • ThaldarinThaldarin Alonzi! Members, Constellation Join Date: 2003-07-15 Member: 18173Posts: 6,132
    Lets put it this way, if you had a gig, I would be there too smile-fix.gif
  • jumpingjodajumpingjoda Members, Constellation, Reinforced - Shadow Join Date: 2003-12-14 Member: 24367Posts: 1,415 Advanced user
    Song: October
    I liked the first few seconds of the rhythm but after it gets a bit louder it sounds a bit boring. Maybe vary a bit just to bring in some *oh this sounds different* feeling into it.

    I have completely no experience in creating music, i can just tell you what i didn't like smile-fix.gif .
  • DarkATiDarkATi Revelation 22:17 Members, Reinforced - Shadow Join Date: 2003-06-20 Member: 17532Posts: 2,545 Fully active user
    QUOTE (Thursday- @ Sep 10 2004, 02:36 PM)
    Lets put it this way, if you had a gig, I would be there too smile-fix.gif

    I'm pretty stupid and unable to understand what that means. How about you just say, "I like it. or I don't. and why. smile-fix.gif

    ~ DarkATi
  • MulletMullet Members, Constellation Join Date: 2003-04-28 Member: 15910Posts: 3,290
    I think you sound alright. Is it anything new and exciting, no....not really. But I only listened to four days love.
  • moultanomoultano Creator of ns_shiva. Members, NS1 Playtester, Contributor, Constellation, NS2 Playtester, Squad Five Blue, Reinforced - Shadow, WC 2013 - Gold, NS2 Community Developer, Pistachionauts Join Date: 2002-12-14 Member: 10806Posts: 4,219 Advanced user
    Is it you singing? If so, you've got a good voice for rock. The guitar on the other hand doesn't even sound like its tuned in some places, and the execution seems pretty sloppy too. Keep workin on it though.
  • DarkATiDarkATi Revelation 22:17 Members, Reinforced - Shadow Join Date: 2003-06-20 Member: 17532Posts: 2,545 Fully active user
    QUOTE (Mullet @ Sep 10 2004, 02:59 PM)
    I think you sound alright. Is it anything new and exciting, no....not really. But I only listened to four days love.

    lol, mullet...

    ~ DarkATi
  • GrayDuckGrayDuck Members, Constellation Join Date: 2003-05-08 Member: 16134Posts: 274
    WantedVerse1
    Love the vocals, guitar seems a bit flat… liven up that guitar and you’ve got a hit. Try to make the guitar as ‘excited’ as your voice gets… if that makes sense.

    October-Verse1
    Like the guitar tune though you need another level of guitars or to kick it up a notch somewhere in there after the intro. This song also has potential to be signed after being changed around a bit.

    Four Days Love4
    By far my favorite. Guitar and vocals blend together wonderfully. I’d like the whole song!

    All in all you have a lot of talent. If you keep it up someone will sign you wink-fix.gif If nothing else I’d be with Thursday at one of your gigs! Play near Sacramento ever?!
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  • ThaldarinThaldarin Alonzi! Members, Constellation Join Date: 2003-07-15 Member: 18173Posts: 6,132
    QUOTE (DarkATi @ Sep 10 2004, 08:49 PM)
    QUOTE (Thursday- @ Sep 10 2004, 02:36 PM)
    Lets put it this way, if you had a gig, I would be there too  smile-fix.gif

    I'm pretty stupid and unable to understand what that means. How about you just say, "I like it. or I don't. and why. smile-fix.gif

    ~ DarkATi

    Thats a yes tounge.gif
  • DarkATiDarkATi Revelation 22:17 Members, Reinforced - Shadow Join Date: 2003-06-20 Member: 17532Posts: 2,545 Fully active user
    QUOTE (Thursday- @ Sep 10 2004, 03:14 PM)
    QUOTE (DarkATi @ Sep 10 2004, 08:49 PM)
    QUOTE (Thursday- @ Sep 10 2004, 02:36 PM)
    Lets put it this way, if you had a gig, I would be there too  smile-fix.gif

    I'm pretty stupid and unable to understand what that means. How about you just say, "I like it. or I don't. and why. smile-fix.gif

    ~ DarkATi

    Thats a yes tounge.gif

    wppt - Pass it on, the new way of saying w00t in 1337 speak.

    ~ DarkATi
  • EpidemicEpidemic Dark Force Gorge Members Join Date: 2003-06-29 Member: 17781Posts: 3,104 Advanced user
    edited September 2004
    Nice voice, may have some rough edges but clearly some talent there smile-fix.gif It almost sounds like it could've come from what a radio sometimes play (haha, I'm being very specific)
    I would, once you get some material up, release an album for free or something so a broader population will try it out and record label will be liek: omg, gib contract, plz smile-fix.gif


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  • HibameHibame Members, Reinforced - Shadow Join Date: 2003-11-16 Member: 22974Posts: 585
    i thought the voice needed a bit of work, but its a good start. How good are you at guitar, can you play "Flight of the Wounded Bumble Bee" by Nuno Bettencourt good, if not grab some tabs ^^

    But I think your at a good start
    The game is balanced, the players are not
  • DarkATiDarkATi Revelation 22:17 Members, Reinforced - Shadow Join Date: 2003-06-20 Member: 17532Posts: 2,545 Fully active user
    QUOTE (Hibame @ Sep 10 2004, 04:51 PM)
    i thought the voice needed a bit of work, but its a good start. How good are you at guitar, can you play "Flight of the Wounded Bumble Bee" by Nuno Bettencourt good, if not grab some tabs ^^

    But I think your at a good start

    Heh *sniffle sniffle* nooos I can't playz0rz teh flight er teh wounded bumbleb33z0rz!!1111

    Stupid song... lol anyway thank you I'm only just 16 since May so I have some time to develop my voice and guitar skills alot more and I will. smile-fix.gif

    ~ DarkATi
  • AllUrHiveRblong2usAllUrHiveRblong2us By Your Powers Combined... Members Join Date: 2002-12-20 Member: 11244Posts: 4,646
    At does not rhyme with attack. Thank you. And upon further listening, this song makes no sense, and without bass you sound far too much like White Stripes for comfort.
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    YOU GO NOW!
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  • DarkATiDarkATi Revelation 22:17 Members, Reinforced - Shadow Join Date: 2003-06-20 Member: 17532Posts: 2,545 Fully active user
    QUOTE (AllUrHiveRBelong2Us @ Sep 10 2004, 07:03 PM)
    At does not rhyme with attack. Thank you. And upon further listening, this song makes no sense, and without bass you sound far too much like White Stripes for comfort.

    Six and **** don't rhyme but Goldfinger did it. Thank You. And I intend on adding bass and drums later.

    ~ DarkATi
  • ThE_HeRoThE_HeRo Members Join Date: 2003-01-25 Member: 12723Posts: 1,599
    It's pretty good, there's definately talent there. The guitar does need to liven up a bit in the first two, and the last song was pretty good. Keep it up man. Does your local radio station sometimes play local music? Call them up, submit them your best song, and people will hear it. See if that works.
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  • DarkATiDarkATi Revelation 22:17 Members, Reinforced - Shadow Join Date: 2003-06-20 Member: 17532Posts: 2,545 Fully active user
    QUOTE (ThE HeRo @ Sep 10 2004, 09:09 PM)
    It's pretty good, there's definately talent there. The guitar does need to liven up a bit in the first two, and the last song was pretty good. Keep it up man. Does your local radio station sometimes play local music? Call them up, submit them your best song, and people will hear it. See if that works.

    I suppose some station does, I'm in Dallas, which is like the third largest radio market so I would imagine someone would play it, yeah.

    ~ DarkATi
  • SwiftspearSwiftspear Custim tital Members Join Date: 2003-10-29 Member: 22097Posts: 7,018
    I hate to be brutally honest, because I am not that kind of person, but you need alot more practice with your guitar, at least if that is the instrument you intend to play the majority of the time. Honestly your sound isn't terrible, but its nothing I counldn't reproduce with just a bit of time and practice, and I don't even own a guitar. You definately have a good enough voice for vocal parts, but you really need to keep working on your guitar skills, at least if you ever want to do much more than just harrasing us on the NS forums to tell you how good you are tounge.gif
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  • NuketheplaceNuketheplace Members Join Date: 2002-09-02 Member: 1266Posts: 432
    The beat on the guitar is really repetive in the first two songs. I thought thats that the bass was for. If I were you I would just drop the guitar, and have the person that played Four Days Love play in your band. I think you should focus on your singing your voice sounds really good when your not focusing on playing the guitar. Also try to get a little better sound quality out of your next mics. That quality was really crappy.
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  • DarkATiDarkATi Revelation 22:17 Members, Reinforced - Shadow Join Date: 2003-06-20 Member: 17532Posts: 2,545 Fully active user
    I appreciate all the comments, I was looking for honesty. The mic I use was $30 at RadioShack, I'm saving for a good condenser studio mic by Audio Technica right now. I admit my skills at Guitar are lacking but I wasn't really focusing so much on the music as I was the vocals. I'm not going to play anything live, I want to get signed as a solo artist and just sing, have a band that does the music. If that makes sense.

    In other words... Steven Tyler is IN A BAND; Aerosmith.

    Justin Timberlake HAS A BAND, but is a solo artist.

    Well thanks again for the Brutal Honesty!

    ~ DarkATi
  • illuminexilluminex Members, Constellation Join Date: 2004-03-13 Member: 27317Posts: 784
    Here's the main problem you are going to run into:

    most artists that have bands for "backup" are pop artists. Your voice does not fit the pop genre, and record companies know that.

    Now, if you are a great rock singer with excellent guitarist abilities, then you can form a band to support you. Something alot like Lenny Kravitz.

    If you want to make it on your own, you need to learn how to either play one instrument exceptionally well, or simply learn how to play several instruments well enough to record and self produce yourself; pull a Trent Reznor of sorts.

    You need to set yourself apart from what everyone else is doing in some way that will create a fan base.

    Don't just emulate what you listen to or like musically. Take it a step beyond. Make it yours.

    And work on your guitar tounge.gif
  • DarkATiDarkATi Revelation 22:17 Members, Reinforced - Shadow Join Date: 2003-06-20 Member: 17532Posts: 2,545 Fully active user
    QUOTE (illuminex @ Sep 10 2004, 11:42 PM)
    Here's the main problem you are going to run into:

    most artists that have bands for "backup" are pop artists. Your voice does not fit the pop genre, and record companies know that.

    Now, if you are a great rock singer with excellent guitarist abilities, then you can form a band to support you. Something alot like Lenny Kravitz.

    If you want to make it on your own, you need to learn how to either play one instrument exceptionally well, or simply learn how to play several instruments well enough to record and self produce yourself; pull a Trent Reznor of sorts.

    You need to set yourself apart from what everyone else is doing in some way that will create a fan base.

    Don't just emulate what you listen to or like musically. Take it a step beyond. Make it yours.

    And work on your guitar tounge.gif

    Ah but what you just said would contradict itself a bit because I would be doing something different by being a pop artist with that kind of voice, agree? wink-fix.gif

    ~ DarkATi
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