The discovery - first installment

Silarn

<div class="IPBDescription">A story w/basis from saratoga series</div>Well, I hope you all like it...
It's very short and there isn't any general TSA vs. Xeno combat in this one. Its more of a short Prologue really, but it gives you the basic idea behind the rest of the story.

I was going to have it on a site, but there seems to be a server problem so I just attached it.

Silarn

Grr, I edited the file but evidently the server uploaded it before hand so here it is again. (I had to do some editing.)

Silarn

Bah, nobody has even thought to lightly scan this yet...

Anyway, there was no time today but I will be writing the the next (much longer and more 'exiting&#39<!--emo&;)--><img src="http://www.natural-selection.org/iB_html/non-cgi/emoticons/wink.gif" border="0" valign="absmiddle" alt=';)'><!--endemo--> segment very soon.

HBNayr

It's a very nice start.  I'll be interested to see how you handle the action sequences...

-Ryan!


The better part of valor is discretion.
-- William Shakespeare, "Henry IV"

Silarn

Thanks, I'm getting up to there as we speak... And the next post will be on a website... Then I'll just direct you back to the website and tell you of changes! <!--emo&:D--><img src="http://www.natural-selection.org/iB_html/non-cgi/emoticons/biggrin.gif" border="0" valign="absmiddle" alt=':D'><!--endemo-->

Sgt_X

I just read the first sentence and it looks like I'm going to have to change which planet the squad in my next story that I'm conceputlizing has to save. Oh well, I'm flexible.

Edit: Nope I can still do what I have planned, I don't know what you plan on doing but please make mention of another TSA ship (the First Strike again) entering system to start setting up a perimeter on the planet witht the mining colony about a day or two latter. That is if your story goes that far into the futre.

Now for the critique, if it is the same system you spelled it wrong <!--emo&:)--><img src="http://www.natural-selection.org/iB_html/non-cgi/emoticons/smile.gif" border="0" valign="absmiddle" alt=':)'><!--endemo--> (It's Ketean.) And other than that i like it.

Silarn

Yes, and, erm, sorry. I'm quite flexible too, so if you really want me to change anything( else), I will. (should have contacted you first anyway)

Edit:
Hm, hopefully people read these posts before reading the story...
Don't download the prologue yet... I've made some minor corrections and alterations as well as adding a fairly large portion to it (not including the first chapter).

Once I think I've finished the first chapter I'll be making a new topic just for the story (this one makes you think it's about the first part, not the whole story), from there I'll be telling you the web link and informing you all when a new section's been added.

Edit Numero Dos:
I also made that cartoony little animation for my Avatar, like it? <!--emo&;)--><img src="http://www.natural-selection.org/iB_html/non-cgi/emoticons/wink.gif" border="0" valign="absmiddle" alt=';)'><!--endemo-->

-Silarn

Silarn

Okay, now I'm ###### off... I just spent an hour finishing the Prologue and the computer decides that clicking the save button doesn't mean save... I lost everything new that I wrote. I had probably somewhere between 3 to 4 times more story written...