Forsaken - Chapter 1

eediot

er

cant you just not steal my ****?

eediot

dont give me this bs about 'my characters already developed man' or 'i just randomly thought of it, and it seemed to fit'

cos that just bs

change it. dont be ****

That_Annoying_Kid

eh

me senses bad blood brewing, me no wants bad times


I think for now the character will stay the same, it's a chance occurance and I had no intention of pirating/ripping off/ stealing your work in any way...

eediot

<span style='color:red'>** Nuked ** Settle down please</span>

That_Annoying_Kid

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I wasn't thinking of your story as I was righting mine
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eediot

<span style='color:red'>** Nuked ** Definitely settle down</span>

MonsieurEvil

Can't the name be altered - have we no search and replace functions here???

That_Annoying_Kid

eediot
in all other chapters of the story I will change the name, same with the final release...
now thats it's settled, can I get a hug?

eediot

ok <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo-->

im happy now <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo-->

jst respect other peoples work

That_Annoying_Kid

good to hear
but I still didn't get my hug...<!--emo&:(--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/sad.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='sad.gif'><!--endemo-->

eediot

/shifty eyes

/hug

That_Annoying_Kid

awwwwwwwwwww
cutecutecute!

*dumps more dirt on already buried not sharp hatchet*

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CplDavis

Nice work, keep it going, dont stop lol ill keep reading

That_Annoying_Kid

is this in reference to his story, or the last couple pages of thread? <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif'><!--endemo-->

eediot

Okay, i've got an idea

im just wondering - i can end it in this next chapter which my idea would work to, or i could somehow delay it and last 3 chapters.

im just wondering, based on what ive written so far, do you want it to extend a little bit more, or do you want more action-packed or something

im just curious <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo-->

That_Annoying_Kid

I would say if you want to draw it out then do so, but if you can cramm a big firefight/battle/battles into a good story then I'm all for aliens (or marines) getting pwned

BadKarma

<!--QuoteBegin--eediot+Apr 19 2003, 09:07 AM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (eediot @ Apr 19 2003, 09:07 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> incidentally, can anybody tell me the proper military heirachy thingy?

i.e PRIVATE, etc <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><span class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
Sorry I couldnt get back to you sooner. The list below isnt detailed but good for general purposes.

Private
Corporal
Sergeant
Lieutenant
Captain
Major
Colonel
Brigadier General
Lieutenant General
Major General

Like I said, general purposes.

eediot

thanks, but could you elaborate a little bit as well, please?

im just a little confused

i.e private - basic soldier grunt guy. lowest of low.
then liutentant - next up in line, controls all of his soldiers. is tactician, and doesnt fight that much.

etc

thanks

BadKarma

No problem. Ok, all ranks below Major are considered "enlisted". These are the men that do the actual fighting. A private would outrank no one. A corporal may be in charge of a small squad. A sergeant would assist the Lieutenant. A Lieutenant would control a platoon of men. A Captain could possibly control a regiment, depends on how thin officer numbers are. Alright, all ranks above and including Major are considered officers. These are the men that are generally in the back, observing and stratageizing, although a Major could see some action depending on the situation. A Colonel would have quite a bit of power, usually in charge of a number of regiments. Generals observe all in their respective feilds.

That_Annoying_Kid

un-enlisted=expendable grunts (lmg)
enlisted=not expendable, semi-grunts (hmg/jp or Ha/gl)
generals=far from combat, unless there generals who support the troops, and not there own ego <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif'><!--endemo--> (commander)

eediot

k, thanks

how many people / squads would be in a platoon? [im assume squad = 6, as in clan wars ;P]

That_Annoying_Kid

I'm telling ya, ask your military questions to MonsE, he knows....

BadKarma

Yea the MonsE guy would be better cause im getting my info from cadet training and he was a Marine but I tell what I can. In the platoons in my regiment there are about 24 people in each platoon. There are about 9 platoons plus a 40 person drill team. So I'd say about 400 hundred people to a regiment.

eediot

mm army

my brother is set on being a cop [hes 16.. or 17, ****, i cant remember <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif'><!--endemo-->]

but i think he thinks hes going to get a lot more action, put away a lot more scumbags than he really is

anybody have any info on becoming a cop, and what its like? ta <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo-->

That_Annoying_Kid

It's like a two year training thingy, I really can't say, again MonsE and google are your friends...plus he could ask @ his local police station.....<!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo-->

eediot

hehe, theyd probably lock him up at the interview

he is a weird dude <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo-->

"u see a man selling what looks like drugs to an underage white female for sexual actions. what do you do? note, you have no backup"

"i walk up to the %^&#$%@$ and i $%&@#$#$% his #%^ @#$#$^$%^ face and $#^$%&@ to %#^#$% stick a $#^%@#$ and $%^#$% $#%^%^ piece of $@% #@$#$^$^ #@$%$%^."


"..............hm."

eediot

he's very... outspoken

anyway,

im going to start on 2nd chapter really really soon guys

there'll probably be 3 chapters in total... <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo-->

That_Annoying_Kid

good times

[shameless pimpin]
why hasn't anyone posted comments on my fourth installment of fan-fic?
grrr
[/shameless pimpin]

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eediot

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That_Annoying_Kid

wh@?!

no one has!

you have 59 responses! be thankfull! <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif'><!--endemo-->