Natural Selection: Short Story

Vicious_VPVicious_VP Join Date: 2002-12-05 Member: 10492Members
edited December 2002 in Fan-Fiction Forum
<div class="IPBDescription">Based COMPLETELY on my own imagination</div> I had no knowedge of a "backstory" for this mod when I wrote it, so I just made it up as I went along.
If all goes well, this will be a short story that I will keep adding to until its completion.

Here are the first installments:

<a href='http://www.clanvicious.com/articles/nsstory.htm' target='_blank'><b>NATURAL SELECTION : SHORT STORY</b></a>

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  • Jerry_111_ElendJerry_111_Elend Join Date: 2002-10-02 Member: 1407Members
  • Vicious_VPVicious_VP Join Date: 2002-12-05 Member: 10492Members
    <!--QuoteBegin--Jerry_111 [Elend]+Dec 18 2002, 06:01 AM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Jerry_111 [Elend] @ Dec 18 2002, 06:01 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->I love you<!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><span class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->
    Well ... thanx ... ?! <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' valign='absmiddle' alt='biggrin.gif'><!--endemo-->
  • bigbbigb Join Date: 2002-11-13 Member: 8421Members
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  • SupernornSupernorn Best. Picture. Ever. Made. Ever. Join Date: 2002-11-07 Member: 7608Members, Constellation
    edited December 2002
    i shouldnt but i cant help it....

    it coulda been longer...

    HAHAHAHAHAHA!

    EDIT:

    didnt think i had to explain the joke...so here goes:

    the title is called: SHORT STORY
    i said it COULD OF BEEN LONGER....

    /me points gun at your head
    LAUGH...

    hahaha
  • Vicious_VPVicious_VP Join Date: 2002-12-05 Member: 10492Members
    edited December 2002
    <!--QuoteBegin--supernorn2000+Dec 18 2002, 10:40 AM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (supernorn2000 @ Dec 18 2002, 10:40 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->i shouldnt but i cant help it....

    it coulda been longer...

    HAHAHAHAHAHA!<!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><span class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->
    Well, it's only the first two chapters .... more to come! <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' valign='absmiddle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo-->

    [EDIT] OK ... I'm with ya! Good one! <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' valign='absmiddle' alt='tounge.gif'><!--endemo--> [/EDIT]
  • GwahirGwahir Join Date: 2002-04-24 Member: 513Members, Constellation
    A few things stand out. Like saying the fade is called so because it can cloak, while it is called a fade for its blinking ability, which was unmentioned in the story. Fading out of view and fading in somewhere else. As for the onos, it got its name from the first contacts with it as well, "Oh no!"

    Other than that, I'm sure an atmosphere of morbidity thick enough to pour into a mug was your intention. Enjoyable, but not my prefered style.
  • Vicious_VPVicious_VP Join Date: 2002-12-05 Member: 10492Members
    <!--QuoteBegin--Gwahir+Dec 18 2002, 01:17 PM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Gwahir @ Dec 18 2002, 01:17 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->... the fade is called so because it can cloak, while it is called a fade for its blinking ability ...

    As for the onos, it got its name from the first contacts with it as well, "Oh no!"<!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><span class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->
    Thanx. But as I stated in the first post, I had NO knowledge of the REAL backstory of the mod, so it all was made up on the "fly" ... so to speak.
  • XaniethXanieth Join Date: 2002-11-06 Member: 7280Members
    Pretty damn good for being made up on the fly.
  • WindelkronWindelkron Join Date: 2002-04-11 Member: 419Members
    nice!!!!!!! a great read!

    very sinister and brooding <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' valign='absmiddle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo-->
  • InvasionInvasion Join Date: 2002-12-22 Member: 11323Members
    This piece shows signs of great creativity, writing ability, and, above all, intellect. Admittedly, the second of the aforementioned still has room for more refinement (a little bit of proof-reading is needed, particularly for the first part; I can make a short list of the few mistakes I noticed), but I really think that you have "it," at least in terms of creative writing (this is coming from a 2nd year university of maryland journalism/japanese major, for all that's worth <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' valign='absmiddle' alt='tounge.gif'><!--endemo--> ).

    I really like your work. Are you currently/aspiring to be a professional writer?

    inv
  • KRQShipPaganKRQShipPagan Join Date: 2002-11-18 Member: 9232Members
    This is great, I've read Chapter One and I'm loving it so far. It's well written, with few to no mistakes visable. That and I like it ^_^ . Keep on writing. I'm going to go keep on reading now.
  • AdvisorAdvisor Join Date: 2003-01-10 Member: 12104Members
    gj... Is there more chapters after this one because it is kind of open ended.
  • Vicious_VPVicious_VP Join Date: 2002-12-05 Member: 10492Members
    Sorry all ... I have not had time to continue the story-line in the last months. I will get back at it soon if all goes well. I have been creating a complete "overlay" for NS as I did for CS, so that has taken a good portion of my evenings as of late. You can check it out <a href='http://www.clanvicious.com/forums/viewforum.php?f=4' target='_blank'>HERE</a> if you like.

    <i>I really like your work. Are you currently/aspiring to be a professional writer?</i>
    Nope. Just an out-of-work graphic designer/web designer that enjoys writing as well. <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif'><!--endemo-->

    Glad you all like, and thanx for the "props"!
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