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AlcapwnAlcapwn "War is the science of destruction" - John Abbot Join Date: 2003-06-21 Member: 17590Posts: 1,965Members
My first Fan-fiction...
"Are those vents welded ncie and tight MARINE?" "Yes sir" i replyed, tired from the landing. I looked around out the windows, and i saw nothing but a blinding blizzard raging down on us. This place was so cold and uninviting. I hated it.

"Commander, any further orders?" "No soldier, go get some rest" the comm said. I went into a corner and set up my sleeping-bag. "God i hate this place" i said to myself, And tried to fall asleep. I had trouble. I knew something bad was going to happen tomorrow.

I awoke to see the commander dropping heavy armor for everyone that was on the mission. "Gentlemen, you are going to go on a mission" he said, his voice booming in my ear. "Squad one will all pick up a plating of heavy armor, and im not giving it to you becuase i like you. Im giving it to you becuase the tempature out there are -120 degrees Fahrenheit. So without it, you will FREEZE to death!"

The comm sent a squad of men out to rondevouz with a supply convoy and escort it backto the base. The rest ofthe people left behind will stay and defend the base. The minute i set foot outside of the door, i new something terrible was going to happen. "Allright men, Movout!" and with the commandes orders, we stuck together all the way to our waypoint.

-To be continued-

Tell me what you think! Should i keep on goign or stop right here? marine.gif
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  • MasterGMasterG gmfbst Join Date: 2003-08-24 Member: 20169Posts: 494Members
    Keep going!!! Like how you write!
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  • PFCNublarPFCNublar Join Date: 2003-04-23 Member: 15792Posts: 1,297Members
    Not bad. First fan fiction to have a natural enviroment in it. As in snow. biggrin.gif You must continue.
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    Touche.
  • AlcapwnAlcapwn "War is the science of destruction" - John Abbot Join Date: 2003-06-21 Member: 17590Posts: 1,965Members
    yeah, i will probably finish it up tommorow..

    There will be 3 parts, that was the first one... wink.gif
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  • KungFuDiscoMonkeyKungFuDiscoMonkey Creator of ns_altair Join Date: 2003-03-15 Member: 14555Posts: 2,588Members, NS1 Playtester, Reinforced - Onos mod
    QUOTE (h20 @ Sep 2 2003, 04:26 PM)
    120 degrees Fahrenheit. So without it, you will FREEZE to death

    120 degress Fahrenheit is pretty hot acctually. 120 degress Celcius is hotter than boiling water, mabye you mean 120 Kelvin?
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  • zoobyzooby Join Date: 2003-08-26 Member: 20236Posts: 429Members
    first of all, that's -120 degrees Fahrenheit.

    And as to why they're using the Funky F*ed up temperature scale in the future, don't ask.
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  • KungFuDiscoMonkeyKungFuDiscoMonkey Creator of ns_altair Join Date: 2003-03-15 Member: 14555Posts: 2,588Members, NS1 Playtester, Reinforced - Onos mod
    LOL, My bad. Mabye you should attach the negative sign to the 120 so that it looks like -120 and doesn't confuse those of us who read too fast. smile.gif
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  • noobynooby Join Date: 2003-04-21 Member: 15717Posts: 472Members
    I'm interested, yay.
  • AlcapwnAlcapwn "War is the science of destruction" - John Abbot Join Date: 2003-06-21 Member: 17590Posts: 1,965Members
    edited September 2003
    -Part 2-

    When we arrived at our waypoint, we didnt know what to expect. We hadnt engaged any enemy activity.
    I didnt think we would. How could they survuve out here without some sort if heavy armor. The convoy came into veiw. It was only a couple truck, hovering acrsoss carrying people, eqipment, and other sutff. "God what the HELL was that?" a private said. "What?" i responded nervously.

    POOF! POOF! POOF! Was that somebody firing a grenade launcher? "Whats going on?" i screamed over the radio. I turned around to see my Hud cluttered with symbols, motion tracking and vital sighns. "AHHHHHH HELP ME HELP ME AH IT BURNS! AH UHHHHHHHHH.........OH" "No!" I started firing like crazy with my Heavy Machine gun. An ono just ate my squadmate! "Die you son of bitch!!! DIE!"

    CREEEAKKK! "What the hell was that? said another squad member. SPLASH! "Crap! the Ice had broke under all of this weight!" The ono went with it. Splashing around like crazy. I left it there, and trying to keep up with the convoy.

    On the way back to the base, the blizzard started to pic up. "God i cant see my feet with all of this snow!" "Yeah..." i said. Where was the comm? Why didnt he help us when the kaharaa ambushed us? He didnt drop anything for us. I couldnt reach him by radio.

    When we reached the base, no one would open up the Blast doors. "Hey guys! Open up its us! We've got the convoy!" Nobody responded. "Let me try, one of the more experinced marines said. He whiped out his welder and started welding it open.

    When the door finally opened. We saw a horrible sight. Blood everywhere. Red human blood. Dead bodies, guns, a half-damged observation tower. "Oh my god what the **** happended here?" I said. We then saw that the 'Welcome to Europa Research facilitie!' sighn had been changed to say, 'DROPSHIP AT EXTRACTION POINT' "Well at least we know where to go now" i said. And i took my squad and headed off.

    Part 3 will be coming tommorow.

    Incase you havent noticed, this story takes place on Europa, a moon of Juipters. Parts of it are outside, some are in. wink.gif
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  • noobynooby Join Date: 2003-04-21 Member: 15717Posts: 472Members
    lol keep going.
  • RemingtonRemington Join Date: 2002-12-17 Member: 11024Posts: 55Members, Reinforced - Supporter
    omg amazing story, pls finish it!
  • AlcapwnAlcapwn "War is the science of destruction" - John Abbot Join Date: 2003-06-21 Member: 17590Posts: 1,965Members
    sry guys i will finish it i dont know when
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